A new poetic discovery!
I found a new form of poetry the other day, and this is something that always makes me happy! I like words, and doing interesting things with them in poetic ways. So I read about it, and I jumped at the chance to give it a go myself. below is the explanation of the form, followed by my own attempts I’ve written so far. I suspect I will write more of this type of poem.
I feel my second attempt is a superior poem over my first try, but don’t feel either of them are as good as the ones written by the poet who came up with this interesting poetry form.
This website post came to my attention recently, and I was intrigued about its possibilities. The Streetbeatina consists of eight lines, each line having eight syllables. What makes the form both rather challenging and unique is that the first syllable of the first line is repeated as the second syllable in the second line, the third syllable of the third line and so on. Although it is not necessary, if the poet wishes, the repeated syllable can be emphasized by printing it either in italics, bold, or a different color. The repetition of the sound of the syllable at precise intervals provides the poem with a natural beat , and musicality.
If you wish to know more about this, from the man who created it, go here, where I found about it.
My own poetic Streetbeatina poems
Leftovers or Gourmet?
by Carolyn Cordon
Stew for dinner, yesterday’s meal
Can you eat it again remade?
Flavours drew from meat now gone, but
A hungry crew, lines up for more –
Meat tasteless as shoe leather, though
Spiced and revived, made new – chef’s friends
Garlic, chili, flavours true, real,
choices expand, cooking talents grew!
Short and ? Who knows …
by Carolyn Cordon
Yay, it’s time, good things are coming,
hooray, it’s now! Goodbye bad times,
go! I say. We’ve suffered enough
done all we may, each muscle aches
our brains fried, frayed, splattered, scattered …
What’ll come next, I say, wary ….
More bad shit, then I’m not staying!
That’s not a life, beaten, betrayed …
It’s Your Turn Now
If you like writing poetry, and you like challenges, why not have a go at this poetic style, who knows what you may be able to write!
And please, write a comment and tell me what you think about this form of poetry!
These are great, Carolyn! Thank you so much for writing them. It is so gratifying to know that poets are actually writing poems in a form you created.😀
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Thanks Paul, I love finding new ways to be poetical!
I created my own form of poetry around 15 years ago, and I still get a buzz when I see another poet writing a “Cordonostic” poem!
Read more about it here, if you want to:
https://carolyn-poeticpause.blogspot.com/2012/03/create-your-own-poetic-form.html
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I ran a workshop in this poetry form on Sunday, and some absolutely great Streetbeatina poems were written, you would have been thrilled, if you’d been there, Paul!
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Thank you so much for creating your workshop and spreading the word about the streetbeatina. Oh, how I wish I could have been there, Carolyn! I am so proud to hear such great streetbeatinas are being written. 😊
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I like your second poem better than the first, Carolyn; it seems freer, less contrived
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Yes, I agree with you John. The second poem is looser, more ‘jivy’ or something. More in keeping with the feel of the form.
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I admire your attitude: your willingness to try out new poetic forms instead of persisting with the old
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Oh, I’m not letting the old forms go, John. But I’m going to be facilitating a workshop in this new (to me) poetic form, the Streetbeatina poem, on Sunday morning at the P/A Hotel in Gawler, if your free, it would be great to have you with us there again.
The workshop fee is $20 for non waged, or retired people. The fun starts at 11.30am. And then in the afternoon, all of the workshop attendees are the guest poets, and will have the opportunity to read their new Streetbeatina poem/s.
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it sounds exciting , Carolyn but I will be at Aldinga though I’ll be interested to hear how it goes; do you think it’ll catch on?
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I’m not sure if it will catch on, John, but the response from tomorrow will be an indication.
And as I was writing up the workshop notes that will be handed out, I realised I’d made a mess of the first poem, in several different sections, included the first syllable of the poem … oh well, you live and learn, and certainly editing and remaking, are both valuable tools for writers, including poets.
And of course, exploring a new form is a challenge, and there’s nothing wrong with dealing with challenges, it’s how you find out how to do things!
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The response from the workshop attendees was excellent today, and I’m thankful all present got very much involved in learning and using this new (to us) poetry form!
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